Thank you, Jim Hull [Story @ Dreamworks, and Story faculty at CalArts] for believing in me and my story! He thinks this was too much. He wants it simplified, and the ending to be that when LYALL actually lets LUMI touch him, that's when he gets killed. It hurts more that way... I love it!
REAL rough... I'm making them prettier, don't worry. Going to either cut some stuff or change shots, etc. :]